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PLEASE CRITIQUE~ x3

  1. Stormcannon1
    Date: Sat, Oct 31 2009 22:14:09

    How's this? x3



    .:~Old~:.


    Spoiler:
    This was just a vid I recently put up and I would like some critique please. I'd like to be a little better than this by the time of my 2 year...

  2. SJ
    Date: Sat, Oct 31 2009 22:43:33

    try to make it shorter
    use different angles
    use different pens
    the combos have similar linkages and ending
    add more variety
    nice leviathan style stuff at the end tho

  3. Stormcannon1
    Date: Sun, Nov 1 2009 02:54:20

    QUOTE (SJ @ Oct 31 2009, 06:43 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
    try to make it shorter
    use different angles
    use different pens
    the combos have similar linkages and ending
    add more variety
    nice leviathan style stuff at the end tho



    I understand the need for more creativity... I'm working on that as I type.
    But why do I need a different angle? Is there something wrong with this one?
    Also, different pen? Why?

  4. Charlie
    Date: Sun, Nov 1 2009 03:44:49

    Eri's spiderspin mini combo is a spiderspin rev into a rev palmspin.

    I agree with SJ. Your linkage needs improvement and so does your angle. It's decent, but it could be better. As for why use a different pen...well, to be frank, your pen is a bit on the ugly side. Your fingers also lack control.

  5. Stormcannon1
    Date: Sun, Nov 1 2009 18:48:46

    QUOTE (Charlie @ Oct 31 2009, 10:44 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
    Eri's spiderspin mini combo is a spiderspin rev into a rev palmspin.

    I agree with SJ. Your linkage needs improvement and so does your angle. It's decent, but it could be better. As for why use a different pen...well, to be frank, your pen is a bit on the ugly side. Your fingers also lack control.


    Kk~

  6. SJ
    Date: Sun, Nov 1 2009 19:42:49

    QUOTE (Stormcannon1 @ Oct 31 2009, 06:54 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
    I understand the need for more creativity... I'm working on that as I type.
    But why do I need a different angle? Is there something wrong with this one?
    Also, different pen? Why?

    if its the same angle throughout the whole video (almost 4 minutes) its kinda boring
    change in angle gives a new feeling and isnt as boring
    same thing with pens
    different pens = not so boring

  7. ilikepieguy3
    Date: Mon, Nov 2 2009 02:59:43

    The vid needs more sauce; you also need a better linkages and control.

  8. pakspinner
    Date: Mon, Nov 2 2009 03:17:42

    I agree with all of you guys. Your combos were great, thumbs up on that, but u need something different. People get bored watching a person spinning for 2-3 minutes.
    This collab was okay but next mix it up alittle.

  9. Stormcannon1
    Date: Wed, Nov 4 2009 01:35:52

    I meant my skills in accordance to my 2 year mark, not my editting skills. xD Thanks anyways guys. I'll be sure to incorporate sauce in my solo. x3

  10. Stormcannon1
    Date: Sun, Nov 8 2009 00:40:16

    bumpage~ <3