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Off-topic / Song writing

  1. Thewave
    Date: Fri, Jan 15 2010 20:44:54

    Hello UPSB
    Recently I've been writing a few songs of my own and would just like a place to publish a few of the better ones.
    You can also post your own and get feedback.

    I myself will also appreciate if you give me some feedback on my songs.
    Any constructive criticism will be happily welcomed.

    I'll start with my very first song and post more if I see you like it or if people are interested smile.gif


    Missing The Whole

    Will I ever find the missing piece?
    The elusive joy that doesn't seem to sway my way
    Binding my arms and blinding my eyes
    I can't break from the shackles that keep my tied

    Escaping from here seems like a long-forgotten dream
    When will I wake up from this nightmarish scheme?
    Another day passes by
    And life just seems like another lie

    Enter the realm of my reality
    And throw away your biased morality
    Never escaping
    Forever falling
    Blackness descending into my eyes

  2. XYZakiメAM
    Date: Sat, Jan 16 2010 05:37:45

    I wait for the day.
    When all disppears.
    When nothing is what everyone will get.

    And everyone gets what they deserve.
    I can feel the agony dwell inside me.
    It does not change its pace at which it defiles me.

    I feel nothing.
    I feel no one.

    Drown my sorrow,
    Wipe my tears.
    But everyone around, I cannot stand them.

    I fear everyone.
    I fear everything.

    Take me away from here.

  3. Thewave
    Date: Sat, Jan 16 2010 12:08:34

    Very nice smile.gif
    I liked the first 3 lines.
    Very nicely written.

  4. XYZakiメAM
    Date: Sat, Jan 16 2010 21:52:50

    QUOTE (Thewave @ Jan 16 2010, 04:08 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
    Very nice smile.gif
    I liked the first 3 lines.
    Very nicely written.



    wat?

    I literally wrote that in 30 seconds tongue.gif

  5. Thewave
    Date: Sun, Jan 17 2010 03:06:14

    The amount of time doesn't realy mean anything.
    All my songs are written in about 5 minutes because I'm in the mood.

  6. AoD1
    Date: Sun, Jan 17 2010 03:29:37

    QUOTE (Thewave @ Jan 16 2010, 07:06 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
    The amount of time doesn't realy mean anything.
    All my songs are written in about 5 minutes because I'm in the mood.



    id disagree i Rap and when i write a rap im a perfectionest and it will take Hours to days for me to come out with a good rap it will depend on the person.

  7. Thewave
    Date: Sun, Jan 17 2010 20:56:19

    Well, I'm quite the opposite.
    I just have moments when I think of something I want to write, then I write it all and fill in the blanks.
    Twitches and tweaks are always applied but the main song is written pretty fast.